DOL 3
Original:Sentence 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Changed: Mr. Palonia said that there are some athletes on this team that believe everyone should have practice.
Original:Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Changed: To ensure success they should require those in the project, the ones doing the experiment, to have new lab equipments.
DOL 4
Original:Sentence 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Changed: Darnel does not have a reason to question the instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Original:Sentence 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Changed: Olga and I went downtown and to buy new notebooks we need for class and our long term project.
DOL 5
Original:Sentence 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had won.
Changed: Yes, Terri won the game, but at the time we did not know that she had won.
Original:Sentence 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Changed: The effect of the program cancellation which bothered most of our members was to end the project before we can finish.
DOL 6
Original:Sentence 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Changed: You should have heard their voice when I told them how their vacation time would be affected.
Original:Sentence 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Changed: Regardless of what Grandpa said, it will be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 7
Original:Sentence 1: rob commentd that us neighbors has got to be welcoming to children outside of our neighborhood he mentioned to us
Changed: Rob commented that our neighbors should welcome children from outside of our neighborhood.
Original: Sentence 2: neither ben or me because we hae not read the assignment knew the definition of the word chide
Changed: Because neither Ben nor I read the assignment, we did not know the definition of the word 'chide.'
DOL 8
Original:Sentence 1: marcus a serious athlete tries very hard im sure he will see alot of action in todays game
Changed: Marcus, a serious athlete, tries very hard; I am sure he will see a lot of action in today's game.
Original:Sentence 2: the reace between the three relay teams is close none of the 3 however are giving up hope of winning
Changed: The race between the three relay teams are close; none of the three are giving up hope of winning.
DOL 9
Original:Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Changed:Ms. Peres, the science teacher stated "Within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity."
Orignial:Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
Changed: Yesterday, Mum told us that whoever borrows her new sweater has to take it to the cleaners.
DOL 10
Original:Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Changed:Our social studies teacher asked us to write a reports on the South. She said it was to be an emphasis on African Americans.
Original:Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
Changed:Well, I think someone's mother should volunteer to take the rest of us to the concert.
DOL 11
Original:Sentence 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Changed:My oldest sister, who is going to live in the New East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.
Original:Sentence 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Changed:At the end of her speech, Amanda said "If you need further information, do not hesitate to ask me for more information."
DOL 12
Original:Sentence 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Changed: Having read the novel The Man in the Iron Mask, I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Original:Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Changed: Because there were so many things to do I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friends concert.
DOL 13
Original:Sentence 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Changed: Mr. Guarino told us that the Twenty-fourth Corps, which was assigned to Germany after World War II, maintained peace in their country.
Original:Sentence 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Changed: Having finished her foreign exchange trip, Stella requested a plane ticket to the United States.
DOL 14
Original:Sentence 1: i reviewed the book real good i received a good grade on the report said Sonia
Changed: "I reviewed the book well and received a good grade on the report," said Sonia.
Original:Sentence 2: although we had 25 inches of show last Winter the bushes appear to be alright pedro noted
Changed: "Although we had twenty-five inches of snow last winter, the bushes appear to be all right," Pedro noted.
DOL 15
Original:Sentence 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Changed: He was unable to attend our fifteenth high school reunion because he lived too far.
Original:Sentence 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Changed: Regardless of poor weather, the Shakespearean play Romeo and Juliet will be sold out.
DOL 16
Original:Sentence 1: you should of followed three steps first open the hood secondly checking the level and lastly add more oil
Changed: You should have followed the three steps: first, open the hood; second, check the level; and last add more oil.
Original:Sentence 2: although my dog is different than yours we wont have no problem walking them to together
Changed: Although my dog is different from yours, we won't have a problem walking them together.
DOL 17
Original:Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Changed: Does Caroline know whether Raul might have come to the class council meeting at 6:00 P.M., or is he off of the student government.
Original:Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
Changed: There are three qualities that gives this field hockey team advantage in the league: a terrific goalie, a great offense, and a winning spirit.
DOL 18
Original: Sentence 1: walking quiet along the road it was impossible to see that car that was speeding
Changed: Walking quietly along the road, it was impossible for me to see the speeding car.
Original:Sentence 2: after the race begins delia take these here medals to the track club at the school located East of here
Changed: "After the race begins, Delia, take these medals to the track club located east of the school."
DOL 19
Original:Sentence 1: nothing could be farther from the truth mr perez stated than your comments
Changed: "Nothing could be as far from the truth," Mr. Perez stated "than your comments."
Original:Sentence 2: she was quite young no more than 26 when she earned her doctorate consequently she began her career early
Changed: She was quite young, no more than twenty-six when she earned her doctorate; consequently she began her career early.
DOL 20
Original:Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Changed: Yes, they are going to welcome whoever wants to come to the rally whether Democrat or Republican.
Original:Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Changed: This car, a 1966 Mustang, is now extremely valuable regardless of what the T.V. show "Classic Cars" reports.
DOL 21
Original:Sentence 1: because it snowed heavy last night so its alright if noone comes to basketball practice because of all the snow
Changed: Since it snowed heavily last night, it is all right is no one come to basketball practice.
Original:Sentence 2: they mentioned i believe that on january 2 2000 this here building was seventy five years old
Changed: They mentioned that on January 2nd, 2000, this building was seventy-five years old.
DOL 22
Original:Sentence 1: follow some simple rules and youll succeed listen in class doing your homework and learn as much as possible
Changed: Follow some simple rules and you will succeed: listen in class, do your homework, and learn as much as possible.
Original:Sentence 2: in order to interest larry his role in the play has got to be made more challenging martina stated
Changed: "In order to interest Larry, his role in the play should be made more challenging." Martina stated.
Daily Oral Language
Deborah Kim
DOL 1: NA
DOL 2: NA
DOL 3
Original:Sentence 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Changed: Mr. Palonia said that there are some athletes on this team that believe everyone should have practice.
Original:Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Changed: To ensure success they should require those in the project, the ones doing the experiment, to have new lab equipments.
DOL 4
Original:Sentence 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Changed: Darnel does not have a reason to question the instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Original:Sentence 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Changed: Olga and I went downtown and to buy new notebooks we need for class and our long term project.
DOL 5
Original:Sentence 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had won.
Changed: Yes, Terri won the game, but at the time we did not know that she had won.
Original:Sentence 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Changed: The effect of the program cancellation which bothered most of our members was to end the project before we can finish.
DOL 6
Original:Sentence 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Changed: You should have heard their voice when I told them how their vacation time would be affected.
Original:Sentence 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Changed: Regardless of what Grandpa said, it will be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 7
Original:Sentence 1: rob commentd that us neighbors has got to be welcoming to children outside of our neighborhood he mentioned to us
Changed: Rob commented that our neighbors should welcome children from outside of our neighborhood.
Original: Sentence 2: neither ben or me because we hae not read the assignment knew the definition of the word chide
Changed: Because neither Ben nor I read the assignment, we did not know the definition of the word 'chide.'
DOL 8
Original:Sentence 1: marcus a serious athlete tries very hard im sure he will see alot of action in todays game
Changed: Marcus, a serious athlete, tries very hard; I am sure he will see a lot of action in today's game.
Original:Sentence 2: the reace between the three relay teams is close none of the 3 however are giving up hope of winning
Changed: The race between the three relay teams are close; none of the three are giving up hope of winning.
DOL 9
Original:Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Changed:Ms. Peres, the science teacher stated "Within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity."
Orignial:Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
Changed: Yesterday, Mum told us that whoever borrows her new sweater has to take it to the cleaners.
DOL 10
Original:Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Changed:Our social studies teacher asked us to write a reports on the South. She said it was to be an emphasis on African Americans.
Original:Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
Changed:Well, I think someone's mother should volunteer to take the rest of us to the concert.
DOL 11
Original:Sentence 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Changed:My oldest sister, who is going to live in the New East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.
Original:Sentence 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Changed:At the end of her speech, Amanda said "If you need further information, do not hesitate to ask me for more information."
DOL 12
Original:Sentence 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Changed: Having read the novel The Man in the Iron Mask, I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Original:Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Changed: Because there were so many things to do I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friends concert.
DOL 13
Original:Sentence 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Changed: Mr. Guarino told us that the Twenty-fourth Corps, which was assigned to Germany after World War II, maintained peace in their country.
Original:Sentence 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Changed: Having finished her foreign exchange trip, Stella requested a plane ticket to the United States.
DOL 14
Original:Sentence 1: i reviewed the book real good i received a good grade on the report said Sonia
Changed: "I reviewed the book well and received a good grade on the report," said Sonia.
Original:Sentence 2: although we had 25 inches of show last Winter the bushes appear to be alright pedro noted
Changed: "Although we had twenty-five inches of snow last winter, the bushes appear to be all right," Pedro noted.
DOL 15
Original:Sentence 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Changed: He was unable to attend our fifteenth high school reunion because he lived too far.
Original:Sentence 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Changed: Regardless of poor weather, the Shakespearean play Romeo and Juliet will be sold out.
DOL 16
Original:Sentence 1: you should of followed three steps first open the hood secondly checking the level and lastly add more oil
Changed: You should have followed the three steps: first, open the hood; second, check the level; and last add more oil.
Original:Sentence 2: although my dog is different than yours we wont have no problem walking them to together
Changed: Although my dog is different from yours, we won't have a problem walking them together.
DOL 17
Original:Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Changed: Does Caroline know whether Raul might have come to the class council meeting at 6:00 P.M., or is he off of the student government.
Original:Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
Changed: There are three qualities that gives this field hockey team advantage in the league: a terrific goalie, a great offense, and a winning spirit.
DOL 18
Original: Sentence 1: walking quiet along the road it was impossible to see that car that was speeding
Changed: Walking quietly along the road, it was impossible for me to see the speeding car.
Original:Sentence 2: after the race begins delia take these here medals to the track club at the school located East of here
Changed: "After the race begins, Delia, take these medals to the track club located east of the school."
DOL 19
Original:Sentence 1: nothing could be farther from the truth mr perez stated than your comments
Changed: "Nothing could be as far from the truth," Mr. Perez stated "than your comments."
Original:Sentence 2: she was quite young no more than 26 when she earned her doctorate consequently she began her career early
Changed: She was quite young, no more than twenty-six when she earned her doctorate; consequently she began her career early.
DOL 20
Original:Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Changed: Yes, they are going to welcome whoever wants to come to the rally whether Democrat or Republican.
Original:Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Changed: This car, a 1966 Mustang, is now extremely valuable regardless of what the T.V. show "Classic Cars" reports.
DOL 21
Original:Sentence 1: because it snowed heavy last night so its alright if noone comes to basketball practice because of all the snow
Changed: Since it snowed heavily last night, it is all right is no one come to basketball practice.
Original:Sentence 2: they mentioned i believe that on january 2 2000 this here building was seventy five years old
Changed: They mentioned that on January 2nd, 2000, this building was seventy-five years old.
DOL 22
Original:Sentence 1: follow some simple rules and youll succeed listen in class doing your homework and learn as much as possible
Changed: Follow some simple rules and you will succeed: listen in class, do your homework, and learn as much as possible.
Original:Sentence 2: in order to interest larry his role in the play has got to be made more challenging martina stated
Changed: "In order to interest Larry, his role in the play should be made more challenging." Martina stated.